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Pssh

Totally a Barbie song.
*scoff scoff*
No, but really, this is good, I like it. It feels like the melody is sort of wandering around haphazardly, but the instrumentation and sound balance are definitely done very well, I'm giving highest marks for that. Get a little more grip on where you want the song to go and where you want to take the listener, and I think you could get something really great out of your music. I'll go ahead and listen to some of your other stuff too, just to see if I can't pinpoint my criticism a little more.
Sweet coordination, excellent sound.

-Phil
(8-10, 5-5)

Funkypotat0 responds:

Thank you for your honest and helpful criticism, as well as the kind ratings.

A problem with the music I write is that it seems to wander a lot, much like what you said. I've written more than just the two pieces I have up here on Newgrounds, but my two are the only ones I'm remotely proud of. All the rest of my stuff seems to have the straying problem...

Wish I could get rid of it =\ curse my lack of focus while writing!

Hmm

I think your music, like yourself, has the urge to be moving, but for some reason isn't. Kind of seems like the whole thing is sleeping, waiting to build up, but never getting anywhere. You've got some good bass there, but there's nothing to fill out the sound spectrum or resolve the bass, really repetitive too- but--
It's good that you can express yourself through music. Keep doing that and you'll get a lot of good results. Practice too, because the easier it is for you to transfer what you've got in your head onto the computer, the better it will come out. Sometimes you're even able to resolve your conflicts with the music, which is especially cool to listen to.
In short, keep it up, you're not quite there.

Hotplurplegnome responds:

"I think your music, like yourself, has the urge to be moving"
yeah you got that right..:P
but then i presume you have checked every song of mine?
because this song is reaally chill and deep
as for my my other songs who are much more upbeat and hyper(like my self) and "moving" like you said..
you should really check out the other more techbical songs Fx..Hooligan nustyle demo and Reykjavik Belfast
thanks anyways for a great review!

Right on

This is great, I like your melody-- plunking around on the piano is acutally how I get a lot of ideas for my songs, glad I'm not the only one. This is a really cool song because it's attractive to the ear while maintaining a grip on the listener through the nice breaks and percussion. The only thing I would complain about is that I think the ACTUAL melody is lost to the delay effect. The effect you got using the delays is great, but I think it does't quite do the justice to the notes you actually put down.
Good song, 9/10 5/5

sweet mix

This is great, you've got a really really solid theme here. I like the melody, and the synths are just fine. I'm only raising an eyebrow at the varaition-- just near the beginning and certain parts near the end the melody becomes a little overwhelming, in that it feels like I'm listening to the same thing over and over again--- even though you're actually changing the notes being played. I've not run into this before, so it's kind of interesting. I think it seems like its repeating despite your lead because the foundation is insanely constant throughout the piece.
I really like the melody though, you're right it is addicting.
(8/10)
(5/5)

UnrealReno responds:

I forgot to mention, the song is pretty repetitive indeed ^^'
Kinda ran out of idea's.. :P

Thanks for the comment and vote :)

Great job

You translated the song very well between genres, this is one of my favorite songs on newgrounds. I think this works so well because one, this was written by Wagner, meaning the melodic progression and variation is right there where it shouuld be and two, it was remixed by someone with adequate skills. I can't think of any way to improve on it!
Great job.

UnrealReno responds:

Wow ^^ Thanks for the compliments there!

If you find a way to improve it in the future, let me know! :D

AAAGGGH!

Awesome Dude! I really like where you went with this. The buildup at the beginning is great, and the drums really kick ass-- my ONLY complaint is that your percussion hits threshold volume and kind of gives it that grinding sort of harsh sound-- but not in a good way. This would be amazing if you just remastered those drums.
Really like it though, nice job.
8/10
5/5

Cool

I really liked that sliding synth, it really added a cool dimension to the song. I wish your percussion would pop out a little more though--- it sounds like it would be really sweet but it just sort of hides behind the leads.
Sweet ideas though.

Tension--

Nice buildup, it's keeping my attention without going crazy all over the place. It seems, though, that there is some sort of lead missing, like the whole song sounds a little subdued and blanketed--which might tie into your situation. It's a solid song, but I don't think it grips or resolves like it should. There's a lot of tension behind it too-- like it makes you think there's going to be an outburst of greatness but it just never gets out into the open.
Keep writing until you get your lead back, if you can resolve this in your audio I think you'll have one of the best pieces Newgrounds has seen in a while.
PS: Whenever serious stuff happens that I have trouble dealing with, there has never been anything more powerful for me than composition. Keep it up please.

Yeaah

I agree with the review below!
Here's a helpful tip: Try not to repeat parts of your song too often. If you have something really cool, build off of it! It's like a lego castle... you can't just keep building doors right next to eachother! Put some traps in there, some walls, maybe some chairs.
Maybe metaphor isn't the best device for advice.
Good stuff, but not enough to fill the 3:55 that you did.
But yeah, write another one and I bet it will be better. You've got a lot of good ideas in here. (except the guy saying 'go', that was silly and awful most of the time)

chubby-chobby responds:

Haha thanks for the review
I felt the go fitted as the part it was in was rediculously cheesey. I agree with the build around the cool idea, i just need to perfect composing and get a full version of fruity loops so i can spend longer on it.
Another problem is i've not liked any form of dance music for long so i don't really have many definate inspirations yet. And this song should have really been two minutes or so tbh.
hopefully i'll have some great stuff one day, but for now my stuffs pretty run of the mill. Thanks for taking the time =)

haha

Hey, this is a pretty sweet piece, I really like the composition. It would be way way way cooler though if you had some more convincing instrumentation. It seems a little haphazardly written, and-- well, you know a little disjunct, but still pretty good. I like it.
And 1.93 is too low for this song. I definitely think you deserve a 3 at least.

Haphazardly assembling music since 2004.

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